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        "html_text": "<div class=\"fr-view\"><p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(0, 0, 0);\"><strong>In no more than 400 words tell us about your extra-curricular activities, positions of responsibility and an achievement of importance which you are most proud of.</strong></span></span></span></p><p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(0, 0, 0);\">My greatest achievement was in my role as the vice president of a student-led volunteer club called Girl Up Singhania. I was responsible for organising projects and campaigns to promote gender equality. While conducting a demographic survey for another project at a local orphanage in Maharashtra, I came across the poor living conditions of young orphaned children. I was dismayed that the orphanage had a shortage of sanitary supplies due to a lack of funding. To help tackle this issue, I decided to initiate a donation drive and set up collection stalls at 3 locations for 5 days. Through the collections, I provided 100 young children with yearlong sanitary supplies. To provide a permanent solution to the issue, I established a mandate in the club to conduct regular donation drives to support local orphanages. It gave me a great sense of achievement to see that the living conditions of underprivileged children in the area have been uplifted due to my efforts. I brought a real change in children&rsquo;s lives, which was truly rewarding.</span></span></span></p><p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(0, 0, 0);\">A position of responsibility that I undertook this year is the Head of Marketing for the Queen Mary Student Advancement Society. In this role, I conduct social media campaigns, help increase our memberships and grow our reach on campus. Beyond these responsibilities, I volunteered to design a &lsquo;Careers Guide&rsquo; (outlining over 20 careers that law students can take up) and a &lsquo;Law Firms Application Tracker&rsquo; (highlighting vacation scheme application processes and deadlines for over 50 law firms). My creative problem-solving skills and resourcefulness has helped the society achieve a 52% increase in memberships and a 41% increase in our follower count on Instagram.&nbsp;</span></span></span></p><p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif; font-size: 14px;\">I also have a keen interest in negotiation. Recently, I won the Hogan Lovells Commercial Negotiation Competition. I vastly improved my commercial awareness, as the negotiations were based upon business news stories, and a strong understanding of these was necessary to succeed. I dealt with various topics, from ESG-related greenwashing concerns to human rights violations in the Qatar World Cup. I was commended by the judges for my problem-solving and commercial insights that aided me in getting the best deal for my client. Having never met my partner before the competition, we had to quickly form a working relationship, divide tasks and support each other in the negotiation, demonstrating strong teamwork and adaptability.</span></p><hr><p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><strong>Our thoughts</strong></span></span></span></p><p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\"><strong><em>Positives</em></strong></span></span></span></p><ul><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">Very well written, with good spelling, punctuation and sentence structures.</span></span></span></li><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">Covers the three distinct elements of the question - extra-curriculars, positions of responsibility and an achievement - at least to some extent, and the introductory sentence of each paragraphs makes this clear (although perhaps paragraph 3 could have referred back to the &quot;extra-curricular activity&quot; wording to make it even clearer).</span></span></span></li><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">Gives solid context for most of the experiences mentioned, explaining what the organisations do and what their role involved.</span></span></span></li><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">Focused on what <em>they&nbsp;</em>did (using &quot;I&quot;), rather than what was done/achieved more generally.</span></span></span></li><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">The achievement example works well, as the applicant explains the challenges they faced, how they tackled them, and the outcome. It&#39;s a clear/specific example where they achieved something tangible.&nbsp;</span></span></span></li><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">The applicant also alludes to the &quot;...which you are most proud of&quot; wording in the question, by explaining why they personally felt a great sense of achievement.</span></span></span></li><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">Good use of statistics in paragraph 2 to bring the example to life.</span></span></span></li></ul><p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\"><strong><em>Potential points for improvement</em></strong></span></span></span></p><ul><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">In general, if mentioning an organisation, I would briefly explain what that organisation does. It might not be clear to a recruiter what a &quot;Student Advancement Society&quot; is set up to do, and the answer doesn&#39;t explain this in paragraph 2.</span></span></span></li><li style=\"text-align: justify;\"><span style=\"color: rgb(12, 82, 118);\"><span style=\"font-size: 14px;\"><span style=\"font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;\">The question mentions &quot;positions of responsibility&quot; (plural) and &quot;extra-curricular activities&quot; (also plural). However, the applicant only gives one example for each. I would have tried to make room to at least list out a couple of more examples for each. The negotiation example in particular doesn&#39;t give a sense that the applicant is involved in a lot of extra-curricular activities, so I probably would have sacrificed some of the detail in favour of mentioning other activities.</span></span></span></li></ul></div>"
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